Revising Wordy Sentences

The best advice I can give any writer is omit needless words, or wordiness. By omitting needless words in your writing, your message to readers will be expressed concisely and clearly. This doesn’t mean to shortened every sentence or avoid all details in writing, but to to express your ideas using the correct phrases and words.

Here is an example:

The reason why is that I love her and want to marry her.

See how wordy the sentence is above. It bogs down the reader as they are processing the idea(s) being expressed. Here is the revision:

Because I love her and want to marry her.

The sentence is now expressed clearer and concisely than before. The reader can now process the idea(s) being expressed. Here is a list of phrases that come up in writing often:

the question as the whether          replace with…           whether

there is no doubt but that              replace with…           no doubt (doubtless)

he is a man who                               replace with…           he

owing to the fact that                     replace with…           since (because)

in spite of the fact that                   replace with…           though (although)

call your attention to the fact that  replace with…        remind me (notify me)

When writing first drafts, wordiness will be prevalent in your writing. That’s why no one sees your first draft and sentences are often shortened as the revision process continues. (This is all writing, including academia). My blog posts are often revised 30 times before they are posted.